@Anjali N Anjali - you have a nice fluid style of writing with a consistent slant. This means you have a good posture and are placing the paper at the correct angle. This gives you a good base to build on.
I think you have good pen control so most of your work will be on figuring out 'what' to do rather than being frustrated by the 'how' - one can't ask for a better start than that IMO :-)
Now for a bit of the feedback:
1. It seems to me that you are writing at a pretty quick pace. This might be a remnant of your brush and modern calligraphy practice both of which depend on the fluidity of movement to a certain degree. Fluid movements are important in Copperplate too but one cannot let it affect the stroke shape or weight. I suspect the inconsistency you noted in the weight of the shade is mostly due to this. It will take a bit of practice to slow down just enough to have good control throughout the stroke.
I might be entirely wrong in my assumption here and you might actually be going too slow - so correct me if I'm wrong :-)
2. The width of the shaded strokes can be reigned in a bit. The 'i' in 'ill' is a good weight to shoot for. Also, go back and square-off the tops of the letters after completing either the letter or the word (but before the ink dries). This will make your script looks much more polished.
There are only 2 items in your first feedback but these are important. You might feel a bit off when adjusting the speed (up or down) and managing the weight of the letters. Stay with it though and you will soon reap the rewards.
I will be looking forward to your 2nd attempt at this lesson.
- Salman
ps - it makes my job easier if you let the ink dry before taking a picture :-)