@Jennifer M You have given yourself a most excellent launching pad with this start Jennifer. The loop of that 'j' is a thing of beauty.
You have most of the basics in place already and we can jump right into refining your script.Here are a few things to work on:
- The straight strokes have a slight curve to them. This might be due to the speed your write at but I can't be sure. The curve is more noticeable in the longer strokes but it is there in the 'i' stroke too.
- You start to taper off the shaded stroke too early. Again, this might be due to the speed your write at. The taper should only start in the last 1/3rd of the x-height before reaching the base line.
- Some of your shaded strokes taper off before reaching the base line. This creates an inconsistency in the overall texture of your script. Once again, it seems to me like you are writing a bit too quickly for full control.
BTW - the lifts should be invisible if possible. It is great that you can do it naturally.
The square tops should be retouched. I don't expect, or recommend, doing it in one go. In time one can get pretty consistent with making the tops and bottoms square in one stroke but it will never be as precise as retouching.
I will be looking forward to your next attempt.
- Salman