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Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« on: January 10, 2014, 05:11:13 PM »
Hello everybody, I'm both new to this forum and calligraphy and I'm really happy to be here to share and learn from all of you.

Thanks Erica for this great guides.

I did this one just for training, based on your "Step to contemporary calligraphy" sheet (with sumi ink, rhodia paper, hiro41 nib). I'll be happy to hear your feedbacks and your suggest to improve my calligraphy if you have some. Please be indulgent, I'm really new to this.

Thanks again!

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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #1 on: January 10, 2014, 05:45:18 PM »
The ONLY critique I have is that the "m's" are hard to read.  The mountain part should be a little closer.  IMO, since I'm a newbie too!
Other than that... it's perfect!!
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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #2 on: January 10, 2014, 07:38:52 PM »
Hi Vince, nice to meet you. Thank you for sharing your work with us!

I'm no expert, just an "advance beginner," but I find your letterspacing fairly consistent, and so are the thicknesses of the strokes. The slant angle is also very consistent. The letters have a wonderful, light & airy feel to them, plus great rhythm that I really like. Are you sure you're just a beginner??

The only part I see is the letterspacing of imagination - the "ati" are a bit tight, but it's really minor and not anything that would jump out.

Beautiful work :)

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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #3 on: January 10, 2014, 08:14:11 PM »
Thanks Perfectsettings & Linda for your kind encouragements and feedbacks =) I'll work again on it tomorrow. I totally agree with what you said, especially "ati" and "agi" looks a bit tight, the eye of the "g" is a bit round too.. maybe something that looks weird with the "w" too.

Yes Linda, just beginning since 3 weeks, but I have to say I spend like 3 hours everyday because I really love this practice so I've got some hours of writing behind me =)  Oh I forgot, I subscribed to Melissa Esplin's class something like one week ago, I didn't knew that this forum actually exists =) Anyway I don't regret the subscription to her class, it's interesting and she is a great person.
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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #4 on: January 10, 2014, 08:48:29 PM »
Hi Vince,

Welcome to the forum! So happy to see you here. And I *love* that you shared some work for critique.  ;D

As Daisy and Linda said, your work is very nice! I agree with their critique as well. You have very good consistency and great letterforms!

The "m" in imagination reads fine because within the word, it is easily recognizable as an m. Because the "m" is the first, lead in letter for man, it makes it a little trickier to see right away that it is an m. Same for the "n" in no. Perhaps a shorter lead in and a tiny bit shorter initial stroke so it isn't confused for an h.

These are really common issues with contemporary lettering and we all do it. I tend to do it the most with n's since I like to do long descenders and bounce.

But don't be discouraged by any means - you are doing great!  ;D
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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #5 on: January 11, 2014, 07:37:22 AM »
Thanks a lot for the warm welcome Erica and for your feedbacks. I'll definitely try what you said about "m"s this afternoon. I know I must practice more and more and not be discouraged because it's time that will make my practice/curves smoother (I hope so hehe).

Have a nice and creative day!
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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #6 on: January 15, 2014, 08:09:41 AM »
Hi Vince,
I am very new to calligraphy - so I really don't have any room for criticism, but I will say that I think your letters are beautiful.

I especially love the contrast between your really delicate and light upstroke, and your thicker down stroke. Really lovely!
-Karen

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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #7 on: January 15, 2014, 10:32:46 AM »
Thanks so much for your encouragement Karen, you just made my day =) I really enjoy words with very contrasted thick/thins too. We're both new to this, looking forward to see some work you will share =)

Have a nice day!
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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #8 on: January 16, 2014, 08:56:38 AM »
So glad I could brighten someone's day a little :)

I'm working on some things now, but I'm not quite up to par for sharing on the forum yet - soon I hope! Hope you have a great day!
-Karen

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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #9 on: January 29, 2014, 06:39:12 PM »
oh it's lovely...the rhythm is wonderful...it's almost like reading music.

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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #10 on: January 29, 2014, 11:10:42 PM »
Hi Vince,

I'm new here too and think your piece is wonderful! I initially thought, "Why is he putting this up for critique?? It looks fantastic!" :) Had the previous notes not been mentioned, I would've thought it was great as is since I don't have a very discerning eye for this stuff yet. I do agree with what was said though - just those (very) minor tweaks.

Thanks for sharing with us! (I'm too nervous to do that myself!)

-Joanna


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Re: Contemporary/Modern Calligraphy Critique
« Reply #11 on: February 01, 2014, 06:43:54 PM »
Hehe, thanks a lot ladies =)
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