Hi Josten,
You have a really nice style developing. I've seen your improvement ongoing on Instagram. I like how you have done the highlighting on the red and the blue highlight behind the monoline italic.
I would suggest working on the arrangement or composition. Your lettering is very lively and would benefit from a different arrangement.
Perhaps choose one word from the quote and make that larger for more emphasis, then arrange the other lines around it. Look at how other calligraphy pieces are arranged. Study how the design contributes to the lettering.
For this piece, I had a hard time reading the word, "move" because I expected it to be "more" until I read the following words. There should be punctuation after "...plunge into it, move with it, and join the dance."
I like how you used two different styles but the change is in an awkward place. So perhaps instead of the last two lines being in the light style, try to emphasize a few of the words with the lighter italic monoline. Decide which words to emphasize like sense, move, plunge, and/or dance.
Also, watch your 'O's. Although they are consistently the same size in the piece, it looks like a capital in the word "out" so it interrupts the flow. Capitals, punctuation, and line breaks give your reader visual cues in how to read the piece.
Lastly, leave some white space. Try to use white space as a visual element in your design. This gives the eye some breathing room and allows your lettering to really shine.
I highly recommend one of Alan Furber's books, either, "Layout and Design for Calligraphers," or "Using Calligraphy: Layout and Design Ideas."
I hope that helps!
