@jtandy What an improvement! You are well over the initial hump Jim and are almost done with this group.
You have done well to note the curved 'b' and the change in slant. Are you moving the paper as you write - a change in slant often results from writing farther and farther away from yourself as you move along the line.
A couple of other things:
- Square all tops - for the ascenders as well as the strokes that start at the waist line.
- The loop of the 'j' needs some work. The lowest (i.e. the pointed) part of the loop should be centered along the slant line in the middle of the teardrop shape. This will bring it a bit to the left of where you have it.
- The final stroke of the 'w' and the 'b' should be aligned with the slant line from 1/2 x-height and up. It can even curve back ever so slightly as it reaches the waist line. This will make it look better balanced than if you just keep going out at a steeper slant.
Please feel free to change the words if you are bored with them. You have good control of the shades and the letters are generally well formed. We just need to add a bit of refinement before moving on. I am sure you will find the next group much quicker to master.
- Salman