Digitized Spencerian, please help me make it better

[tintenfuchs]

Hi!
So, I'm working on this Lovecraft-inspired postcard and I've digitized some Spencerian for it. And I could reaaally use some help for "perfecting" it. I've been working on it for so long, I can't look at it objectively anymore.
I'd really appreciate any kind of tips, since this is a very important project for me. Really, anything, I can take it xD

Best,
Natascha

[Starlee]

This looks really nice and consistent. If I to say anything, and please take this for what it's worth (I am new to calligraphy and haven't tried spencierian myself), but things I would change: 1) I would make the lower loop in the capital B is less pointy and tilt the B a little more (it doesn't appear to be on the same slant as the rest), 2) I would play with spacing (both in between the letters, slightly more spread out?), 3) Try shifting the second word to the left more, 4) some of the flourishes look too much the same (the big loops). Finally, should mountains be capitalized or need an apostrophe. It seems like a typo. I hope this helps! It really is great though!!

[tintenfuchs]

Thank you, Starlee!

Concerning typos and layout: It's just those three words right now, they will form a meaningful sentence at the end. It's also not the final layout, just the words

[Roseann]

I love it!

[Erica McPhee]

I like Starlee's critique. I did a quick rough of changes I would suggest.

Remember that Spencerian is based on oval shapes, not round. I think the rough tells the rest.  I can't wait to see your finished piece!

[Erica McPhee]

One more thing... make the dots on the "i"s consistent. I like the size of the second one best. And perhaps raise them up just a touch.

[tintenfuchs]

Thank you so much, Erica, you're a life-saver!

[Erica McPhee]

So funny -- when I glanced at this again after posting, I mistook the dot above the u as an i ! 

[tintenfuchs]

I noticed! I have no idea why there was a dot in the first place.
Lookie here, the almost finished piece:

[Brad franklin]

That looks great!

[Erica McPhee]

Wonderful! I love it!!!

[tintenfuchs]

Thank you this was really a fun project. The story behind it is that I'm involved in the Call of Cthulhu Role-Playing-Game community and a campaign is called "Beyond the Mountains of Madness". The characters venture into the dangerous Antarctic of the 1930s and will probably never return ... but if they return, everyone gets a postcard.

[Erica McPhee]

Well, that is perfect then!  Sounds fascinating!